#10725

Looking in the eyes of death

Grim sentence

A grim sentence from a jealous boyfriend, written with words torn out of the pages of life.

#10694

Stormy seas and the ship of mystery

cheers matey's

cheers for the advise Tryynity, I guess I meant the first to be the only one to have the author in it and those after to be just the voice/memories of Mcwho. Will play with it though, see if alittle intro by the author might help. <br>cheers for the comments derek

#10693

Jordan

My humble, thanks.

My humble thank you. I hope someday I can do more justice to both Jordan and Eb. Maybe even Evan and Justin which were all self-assigned exercises but now I get to live with all of them and perhaps I will get to know them all better and create them more intimately.

#10692

WHERE IS THE HELP FOR BRADENTONâ??S HOMELESS?

Plight of the Homeless

Revision needed, I really wanted to read this but found it very hard to relate to being Australian. So I would suggest a re-write being always conscious of whom you are addressing. Give more information to your reader rather than just having a rant about how difficult it is. The mood of this writing is definitely angry, not a criticism, this is a valid topic and one I would have like to know more about. I am most likely never going to experience this, living in Australia. Thank you for sharing.

#10690

Jordan

A pleasant read

This has the potential to be a pleasant story about a subject that for some could be difficult to write about. Nice job.

#10687

WHERE IS THE HELP FOR BRADENTONâ??S HOMELESS?

Eye opener to the Homeless

Authentically written, gives us a new insight into the daily drudge of the homeless.

#10685

Jordan

Nice to see the newly expanded story!

Warming and well-told.

#10681

Jordan

Innovative with a gay theme

Yes, Jordan has his summer of 42! If only I wrote that well, and could treat the subject matter with the proper delicacy - or not as it may be.