#10850

Jealousy

potent

a poem potent with power and rhythm, the last line strikes a perfect note to end on - well done

#10843

Dead Man Talking

Too Short

I like the theme. The prophet Elijah should definitely be in more fantasy stories, and the medical twist was educating. I think the story should be double in length. Elijah should go into detail with his warnings.

#10842

The CO Cabin

An Intriguing futuristic story, well told.

This is a mildly sf narrative that very smoothly and clearly incorporates bizarre concepts - implanted field organs - without needing to incorporate lengthy exposition.<br>I was not entirely convinced of the male protagonist's motives, but was carried along by the sheer force of the narrative (maybe it has field organs too!).<br>Interesting comments on clothes and power - I had somewhat similar thoughts myself, when I visited the local nude beach. <br>My only suggestion - needs some blood to round off the tale.

#10815

FLIGHT FROM OBSESSION Chapter IV

local intrigue

Abby is involved in local intrigue between real estate developers and tribal land ceremonies, with the complication of a traitor in their midst. Good spinning of the yarn.

#10814

Flight From Obsession Chapter II

Warm intimate descriptions

This chapter is full of warmly intimate descriptions and dialogue. Flows beautifully. Well done Karen!

#10813

Flight From Obsession Chapter One

Flows smooth as honey

Karen's prose runs smooth as honey in this lovely description of town and people.

#10812

Flight From Obsession Chapter One

Flight From Obsession

Started this several years ago and finally wrapped it up about four months ago and decided to put it on here with the rest. Hope you enjoy it.<br>Karen MacEanruig

#10801

WE THE PEOPLE

splenid story!

Very well paced story, intriguing start, nice dialogue, satisfying ending.<br>Conveys superbly the feel of a small US town.<br>I would like to read a full scale novel by you - move over, Frederick Forsyth!<br>My only disappointment - I was hoping for a massive gun fight, and lots of sex......(but not all together)